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WORD MASTER CHALLENGE

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Thursday, January 24, 2013

Misha Gericke (My First Book) is starting a themed writing excercise called Word Master Challenge. Every month, she has a different theme to write up to 300 words on. You have a month to come up with your entry, and pot the direct link on her linky. One winner will be chosen each month; the prize a voucher to the book vendor of the winners choice, or a 10 chapter crit from Misha. This month (January) is HOW TO WRITE A NOVEL BEGINNING, only with a twist: In less than 300 words, I want to see your idea of the WORST beginning you can possibly write. The funnier and more creative you are, the better.

My entry isn't funny (as in comedic) but maybe its creative.
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Bleep, bleep bleep.


Janie dug her way out from under the comforter and tapped her long fingers around the head board in search of the alarm clock. When her probing finally landed on the clock, she slapped the snooze button several times without effect, and finally tossed it across the room.

Bleep, bleep, bleep.

Then she realized it was the cell phone alarm. Deciding not to toss the phone as she'd tossed the clock, she slid the cancel tab to silence the annoying noise.  Janie yawned, stretched, and smacked her dry lips together, rolling her tongue around the inside of her mouth and tasting last nights whiskey and a faint trace of latex.

Swinging her legs over the side of the bed, she stood, noticing herself in the wall mirror that doubled as closet doors. Janie took three wobbly steps towards the mirror before standing to her full height of 5'7” and admiring her naked 110 pound self.

“You are hhhooot!” she told herself, scratching her red painted, manicured nails through her short curly mop of blond hair.

She winked a large, round, blue eye that was smeared with black mascara, then stood back to view her double D breasts and flat stomach with a naval ring. Turning sideways, she inspected the purple butterfly tattoo in the small of her back which still had that new ink shine to it.

A blurred shape appeared in the mirror over her shoulder and Janie whipped her head around and stared at a door across the room. The crack between the door and the frame widened, the shape beyond becoming more distinct by the second.

Janie gasped, suddenly realizing she was not alone; and she wasn't in own bedroom.
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Sign up on the linky here to write your own excerpt, and/or to red the other participants. Misha will announce the winner of this challenge and introduce the next theme on Feb 8.

23 comments:

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

She is hot only in her mind.
Good entry, Donna!

Yolanda Renee said...

Oh dear, so funny and yet could end up being a very deadly mistake!

Why does my head automatically go there?

Loved it! Great challenge!

DEZMOND said...

taste of latex stays in your mouth all the way till morning? Didn't know that, how very educational, Donnzie :PPPP

Pat Hatt said...

A night that one prob wishes never happened haha great write.

Misha Gericke said...

Hahaha nicely done. You definitely picked a major no-no to open with.

Will be by again to judge compared to the other entries. :-)

Misha Gericke said...

P.S. Please don't forget to enter your link in my linky list! Wouldn't want to miss you later on. :-)

A.J. Frey said...

Awesome. The latex line made me spit out my coffee. Lol. This sounds like a lot of fun.

Joshua said...

Great entry. I wanted to participate, but I can't find the time.

Susan Kane said...

Oh, Janie--what have you done?

Donna Hole said...

Thanks Alex.

Yolanda: maybe cuz you know me as a writer so well :) or maybe that's where you would take it too. If we had more than 300 words . .

I don't know Dezzy *cough* but it was "semen" originally, and I decided to be a little more creative than that :)

Totally Pat.

Thanks Misha; this was a fun write :)

Hi AJ; how have you been? You disappeared for a while.

Only 300 words Josh :)

Susan: Shhhh, she'll never tell :)

........dhole

VR Barkowski said...

Great entry, Donna. I want to know more. Although with that taste of latex, I'm surprised that she's surprised she's not alone.

~VR Barkowski

Arlee Bird said...

No not funny really. Pretty bizarre and creepy. Nice job. I want to know where the story goes next.

Lee
A Faraway View

Donna Hole said...

VR: blond, hot in her own mind; nah not surprising :)

Lee; I'd so have to clean it up - or sex it up :)

.......dhole

Rusty Webb said...

*second try will be the charm, I hope*

I loved it. I know you went with the overworn cliches here, but it couldn't help but be charming. Good going.

Oh, I did read a book recently that had had an extended self examination sequence in front of the mirror, so at least some folks are still getting published doing that sort of thing.

Michael Di Gesu said...

Hi, Donna,

HA.... All I could think of here until the end, was how she didn't TIP OVER... Double D's on a 110 body and 5'7" ... She wouldn't be able to stand erect without a crane. LOL.

Michael Offutt, Speculative Fiction Author said...

Truly one of the worst beginnings I've ever read. I love how you knowingly embrace the taboo of having your protag awaken in bed. Taste of latex? Ewww.

Congratulations Donna, I think you have a winner here.

Donna Hole said...

Rusty; sadly, I have a couple novels that have started with the wake up in the morning and look in the mirror beginnings. I have since reworked them, but I can't help but love them all the same :)

Michael Di: well, I've been watching some porn lately - purely for research purposes - and all the girls seem to look like that. I've had the same reaction myself. Remember Lonnie Anderson? And Dolly Pardon? Just sick.

Mike O: Thank you Sir. Lets hope that sentiment is a premonition :)

.......dhole

Sheena-kay Graham said...

I'm very curious as to what happens next. A very good entry for such a contest. Thank you for reading my entry and best of luck.

David P. King said...

Oh, wow! What an awesome "bad" beginning to a story. Starting off with the alarm going off is a surefire start. :)

Laura Stephenson said...

Nice job making the MC completely unsympathetic...I have no desire to read further! Talk about a bad beginning.

Damyanti said...

That looks like a good exercise. Well done!

Nick Wilford said...

Well it took her long enough to work out she wasn't in her own room! Self-absorbed characters don't tend to be popular. And gotta love the cliched opening. Great job!

Crystal Collier said...

Oops. I wonder who's alarm clock she hurled. =) That was actually pretty funny. Nicely done.