Friday, June 1, 2012
My excerpt is titled Apologies, at 386 words, full critique acceptable.
The sun finally set, and almost immediately the front room cooled. Reyna could now feel the cool air blowing from the vent. She turned her easy chair to face the breeze, and clicked “new” on the solitaire game.
She sneezed, and reached for a tissue to blow her nose. The room was filled with the fragrance of too many yellow roses. There were only 24, but Jordan had spread them in three’s and four’s in vases all around the room on the book cases, two end tables, the wall shelves and even on the floor.
Besides the natural aroma was the scented candles. All but two had blown out when
the door on his way out an hour ago.
Reyna tugged out another tissue and dabbed her eyes, silently cursing
the allergies that made her nose run and eyes water. Absently picking up the glass of vintage
wine, she attempted a sip before realizing it was empty. She set it on the end table and mindlessly
clicked through the deck of cards on the computer.
She reached for the wine glass again before remembering it was empty. Clicking new game, she tried to ignore her sense of guilt. And the empty glass.
If she got up to refill the wine, she knew she’d naturally check her cell phone, and then be faced with the decision to read the texts she heard arrive over the last half hour. If she read the messages, she might be tempted to accept his apology. How many more would she accept before she stopped caring? If she let this one little thing slide, again, how many more little decisions would be taken away from her?
Reyna glared at the empty wine glass. The laptop heated her leg, and the cooler chose that moment to withhold the little bit of freshness it dispensed. Sighing, she snatched the glass and pumped the lever that dropped the foot of her chair. The time for equivocating had ended.
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Next prompt on June 15 is THE PERFECT EX:
So they've moved on and found someone else. But if you really want them back you're going to have to work for it- even if that means a few changes. But do you really, really want someone back who didn't love you the way you were? Do you really want someone back who's already broken your heart? Aren't you sick of being a masochist? Maybe being the perfect ex means moving on. The perfect new love may be just waiting in the wings. Oops, is he/she being the perfect ex and just using you while trying to win the ex back? Your story/poem! You deal!
And don't forget these important events next week also:
The Giving Voice Blogfest is your chance to express what it means for those people in the form of a poem, excerpt, flash fiction piece. Maximum 400 words in length.
How does your character feel about his situation? How will they cope with the speech problem? Maybe your story will include a Speech & Language Therapist transforming their lives (as the above examples of well known films of real life demonstrate).
and . .
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